Teres

Who is there for him to have fought? I'm betting this is the first serious opponent he or any of the others have faced!

It's a tasteless reference to pregnant women having hormonal mood swings. Might as well say 'bards and teenagers'.

... Oh good heavens, he's having them dig foxholes. Never mind that he's never heard of artillery before and thus has to come up with this on the spot and explain himself, he just 'knows' that digging into the earth will give them cover from the barrage!

In all seriousness, it's a sound idea just not an idea Axis should be familiar with. It should be something he comes up with right there, right then and we should see his reasoning. (Which can be as simple as 'we need cover, we don't have cover, digging into the ground will make cover.)

Yeah, no, 'teetered over' in my experience means something is about to fall not that it has.

Okay, the idea she's going for of friendship and comradery beating back the dark can work, but this instance is badly done. I'm thinking Douglass should have left out the bits about the army's mental states, or at least the madness, and focused on the emotional uplift of the song. (Maybe have Axis start singing when he realizes Belial is there in an attempt to reassure him?)