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Teres ([personal profile] teres) wrote 2024-09-14 05:57 pm (UTC)

Yeah, putting Faraday through an Avar rite without permission isn't right. For all we know there's preparation beforehand, ritual cleansing or instruction or both that's required to fully participate. (And Catholics are forbidden to participate in non-Catholic religion rituals like this because it gives worship to someone other than the Lord. Faraday should not be okay with this!)

SCSF: It would have been so much easier if they had said something like "this is Faraday; she is the Tree Friend from the Prophecy". I would think Raum would be quite a bit more willing, and he should also just know who he is dealing with! (I am so sick of their lying and manipulations!)

And yes, Faraday indeed should not be so wiling to be "presented to the Mother". Good catch!

I'm thinking Faraday felt a bit stung by the accusation that she cut down any trees.

As she well might... Raum should know that she would not be likely to have done so!

Okay, Raum is upset at the state his ancestral homeland is in. Fair enough. However, he should really say what activities he's upset by! I mean, if say all the Christians got chased out of the Holy Sepulchre so it could be used as a barn we'd be pretty dang upset for possibly ever, and we'd say 'and then they used it as a barn!'. But of course, if Doughlass' wrote that she might have to face up to how she's dissing her own food source.

Yes, indeed! And, if I recall correctly, she actually does this with the Icarii later in the book, so why could she not do so here.

It also bothers me that Raum seems more upset about the Acharites supposedly destroying the former site of the Greater Avarinheim than he is about it being destroyed in the first place and the attempted genocide. Like, Douglass, I get the Avar are supposed to be "nature people" and that you want him to deliver a speech, but you should not forget they were genocide targets!

Oh, they are tested at size very small. I get that they think it's necessary, but somehow I doubt it actually is. (Cultures can get really messed up, so I'm not blaming Raum much for that.)

I also do not yet know how it affects their development, so I will not complain either.

For the fic... yes, you have done quite well on what should be done, without it feeling forced. What I further like is the presence of an "inciting incident", so to say, for the Wars of the Axe. It just fits neatly, as does Ceolmund's very long lifespan. (And, naturally, good on Faraday for sticking with what she believes!)


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