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- And it could literally be fixed by just tweaking maybe two lines in the entire trilogy. Five minute edit at most, and bam.

Two lines. Two lines?! If it was like multiple chapters, I could maybe see why someone would be reluctant to change all of that material. But there's no excuse for two(ish) lines. That's either laziness, or incompetence. ...maybe both.

- In fact, in a chapter or so we'll see Raum suddenly fall over for no reason again, and this time he breaks something. You'd think someone who's lived in the forest his whole life would know how to run among trees without falling on his ass, but nope.

Depending on how much later the next chapters take place, I could kind of forgive him for that, considering he was just tortured, so unless he has incredibly fast healing powers, he'd probably be a little clumsy for a while after his captivity.

- Once their initial roles are rendered irrelevant, all Ogden and Veremund do is hang around explaining what everything "means", no matter how blatantly obvious it is.

If their roles are finished for a significant amount of time, then just come up with an excuse for them to fuck off for a while! It would be so much better than having them lurking in the background desperately clawing for a shred of relevancy.

- One of the few character traits Axis consistently has is his raving hypocrisy.

Yeah, I was afraid of that...

- Also why are they naked? The author has a really weird hang-up about random nudity.

In a different book, I would say that it might be for humiliation and demoralization; if you're going to starve and beat them, might as well strip them of their dignity while you're at it. Except...one of them is barely out of infancy, so she's not really old enough to understand the concept of 'dignity', and given Douglass's apparent fondness for characters being nekkid, I'm guessing this is her possible nudity kink flaring up.

- I have far less restraint; in my own spork of this trilogy I went off on multiple expletive-laden rants and called him just about everything in the book. "Axis McDouchebag" was the mildest.

Your own sporking, you say? Might there be a way to read said sporking? I love reading different takes on the same material. No one reads a book the same way as everyone else, and those separate views can be incredibly interesting.

- I suppose it would be redundant of me to say that this is only going to get a million times worse too. The bullshit "Axis is the greatest" carry-on in this book is mild by comparison.

Yeah...I think that goes without saying at this point. *heavy sigh* You know, I'm okay with a protagonist who starts off unlikable, and then grows into a truly good person over the course of the books, but based on what everyone's been saying, he's going to go the other way, and lose any likability he might have at the beginning.