Cut to the next book, in which Azhure laughs excitedly while killing things and graphically threatens to kill a guy. Absolutely no transitional period.
SCSF: How lovely.
Apparently he's "not a hero" because he's nice. According to the logic of this trilogy, you are only a "hero" if you're a raging asshole like Axis. What a lovely message.
Hmmm, I rather think that she means he is "not a hero" because he is Axis' lieutenant in the Axe-Wielders.
This is just ridiculously overconfident. Hagen essentially killed himself and was a fat old man. Belial is an armed soldier who's presumably been trained in combat since he was a kid. And yet somehow gets taken out by Azhure anyway. He should have been instantly demoted for that.
Exactly!
If he's a forest tribal guy, how does he even know how locks work?
That was something I was wondering myself. Rivkah might conceivably have taught him... but it still feels too convenient to me.
...but nope, obviously it was the skinny young woman and not the big muscular angry Forbidden. Axis should have immediately assumed it was Raum, and be cursing himself for taking pity on the guy because now look what he's gone and done! Assaulted Belial, murdered Hagen, and kidnapped Azhure for good measure assuming she isn't just hiding somewhere.
Further, Axis has little reason to suspect Azhure (especially since he did not note Azhure's obvious reactions), given that she has only helped him so far.
This voice? Never explained or seen again.
But of course.
THIS IS NOT THE TIME OR PLACE FOR THIS AND NOR IS THIS THE RIGHT METHOD. Why is he having a shouting argument with a voice in his head while he's running?! This completely ruins any suspense and makes him look completely insane, and it's just about the worst way possible to show a character having a crisis of conscience.
I think it would be much better to have this happen when he is unable to sleep, alongside with some suggestion of what this actually is.
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Cut to the next book, in which Azhure laughs excitedly while killing things and graphically threatens to kill a guy. Absolutely no transitional period.
SCSF: How lovely.
Apparently he's "not a hero" because he's nice. According to the logic of this trilogy, you are only a "hero" if you're a raging asshole like Axis. What a lovely message.
Hmmm, I rather think that she means he is "not a hero" because he is Axis' lieutenant in the Axe-Wielders.
This is just ridiculously overconfident. Hagen essentially killed himself and was a fat old man. Belial is an armed soldier who's presumably been trained in combat since he was a kid. And yet somehow gets taken out by Azhure anyway. He should have been instantly demoted for that.
Exactly!
If he's a forest tribal guy, how does he even know how locks work?
That was something I was wondering myself. Rivkah might conceivably have taught him... but it still feels too convenient to me.
...but nope, obviously it was the skinny young woman and not the big muscular angry Forbidden. Axis should have immediately assumed it was Raum, and be cursing himself for taking pity on the guy because now look what he's gone and done! Assaulted Belial, murdered Hagen, and kidnapped Azhure for good measure assuming she isn't just hiding somewhere.
Further, Axis has little reason to suspect Azhure (especially since he did not note Azhure's obvious reactions), given that she has only helped him so far.
This voice? Never explained or seen again.
But of course.
THIS IS NOT THE TIME OR PLACE FOR THIS AND NOR IS THIS THE RIGHT METHOD. Why is he having a shouting argument with a voice in his head while he's running?! This completely ruins any suspense and makes him look completely insane, and it's just about the worst way possible to show a character having a crisis of conscience.
I think it would be much better to have this happen when he is unable to sleep, alongside with some suggestion of what this actually is.