Okay, if her plan was to clobber Belial this whole time then Douglass should have told us that. (Honestly, I'd have expected her to have fled with Shra without trying to rescue Raum since Raum is much less accessible.)
Yes and yes. Why is she so confident that she can just barge into a place which SHOULD have have been crawling with armed guards and rescue a guy kept in a cell to whose key she doesn't have and doesn't know the location of? She should be first and foremost focused on getting the fuck out of there, even if she regrets not saving Raum later on.
You couldn't expect her to know right from wrong yet, and the thought of executing her for something she couldn't possibly understand didn't sit well with Belial. It wasn't...
It wasn't right.
See, this is how you write about a character actually beginning to come to terms with realising that their views might have been wrong all this time. Nice work!
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Yes and yes. Why is she so confident that she can just barge into a place which SHOULD have have been crawling with armed guards and rescue a guy kept in a cell to whose key she doesn't have and doesn't know the location of? She should be first and foremost focused on getting the fuck out of there, even if she regrets not saving Raum later on.
See, this is how you write about a character actually beginning to come to terms with realising that their views might have been wrong all this time. Nice work!